| as the new year festivities has become |
as New Year festivities have become |
Improves subject-verb agreement. |
| associated and rooted with |
rooted in |
Rooted in is the correct collocation. |
| cars |
automobiles |
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| city centers |
urban areas |
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| Depicts |
Illustrates |
more academic |
| Distribution of energy consumption |
how energy is typically consumed |
more natural |
| fairly |
comparatively |
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| festivals which are dominated |
festivals are increasingly dominated |
Increasingly dominated adds a sense of gradual change. |
| highly |
quite |
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| historical evidence |
historical records |
Historical records better suits the context of written/documented history. |
| in an average Australian household |
in typical Australian home |
more precise |
| increasingly access |
increase in accessing |
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| learning |
acquiring |
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| mediums and social networks |
modern media and social networks |
Media is the correct term for communication platforms. |
| native language |
native tongue |
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| no longer interested in preserving traditions |
no longer interested in upholding traditions |
Upholding better fits the idea of maintaining cultural practices. |
| only |
sole |
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| people and specially youth |
people—especially the youth— |
Especially is the correct word in this context. |
| Proportion of produced gas emissions |
corresponding greenhouse gas emissions |
more precise |
| tend to show a lifestyle that does not exist at all in the past |
promote an artificial lifestyle disconnected from the past |
More precise and natural phrasing. |